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Delusional Angel.

Twist my mind up, influence me.
It's all a dream darling, don't think it real.
We're just passing through; or is life passing through us?

Wrap yourself around me, love––
hold me through the storm.
Do you feel that beating, love?
––it's in sync with the universe.

Life is but a moment; surging through eternity.
This, right now is but a coinciding instant.
We have survived the world, lovely. Do you see it?
Remember me in the morning dear, tonight is absolute.

Pale pink lips and sweet bits.
Sketches and coffee spots.
Full moons and breaking points.

Vinyl vibes and genuine conversation.
Red wine and lipstick streaks.
Kisses and contemplation.



© Rocio Belinda Mendez
If the font is too small please press the A near the title :) x
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Delta-13 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there. I am critiquing this on the behalf of :iconpowerfulwriting: I absolutely love this poem. it is very powerful and beautiful. You have a talented way with words that resonant with the reader. I personally love the line "We're just passing through life or is life passing through us?" I also love, although I'm not sure if this was your intention, how there are two voices in this poem. It seems like every other two lines are being spoken by a different person. Again I'm not sure if this was your intention but it seems to be two lovers enjoying their last moments together before the apocalypse or something. Like I said it might just be me but it adds a bitter-sweetness to the poem which is absolutely lovely.

Overall this is a beautiful piece. Well done!
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014
Oh why thank you! I appreciate your critique, i'm so glad you found a few layers, this piece has quite a few, the two lovers is definitely an option, it's open to interpretation. When I wrote this I felt like I was in a mild trance, trying to find the words to describe what I was feeling, the use of love, lovely, dear, is a way to make it a little more than words, more of a conversation :) Thank you so much again, I love hearing how my writing impacts or makes others feel/think. xx
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rockettreverie Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student Filmographer
This is really good! :meow:
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
:D thank you love xx
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Anninhaxox Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Life is but a moment; surging through eternity. I love that line :) and the entire poem. Lovely! 
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
:) thank you sweetness x
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Anninhaxox Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
You're welcome :) 
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
:) x
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XdarkXnXdeadlyX Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
amazing! XD you put the most beautiful words to it to make it flow so nicely! good job!
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
:) thank you sweets, I appreciate it x
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