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You stole my confidence; you took it like you owned it, you smothered it in neglect, and you threw it in the black hole of your absence.

You used my patience; you smoked it like a drug, you took advantage of my presence, you evaporated us into nothing.

You decapitated our relationship; you cut it at the root, you shook out all the good, and threw the body into your subconscious.

You cut up my affections; you stored them in your selfishness, and turned them to dust.

You broke my heart. You took it in your hands, you tore it into two, it turned cold as ice, and you shattered it across my future with you.

You shocked me to the core, a surreality I long to never feel again. The abundance of my tears was enough to drown me, and suffocate me into an eternal river of agony –– that my memories of 'us' will float upon.

You deceived me beyond repair, I thought you would hold me through the hard times, instead you trampled on my pride, you flattened my hope, you destroyed the love I had for you, kiss by kiss, touch by touch, moment by moment.

You threw us away, like it was nothing but a mess. You crawled back, only to show you're nothing but a boy, who doesn't know what he wants. Nothing but a child too scared to face a woman, strong enough to have held you through the toughest of times, strong enough to have taken your shit, because she was mistakenly thinking it was worth it.

© Rocio Belinda Mendez
When it hurts, write it out.
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FoolishLamb Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This is amazing. I related to this completely. Thank you for such a powerful and hard-hitting spoken word poem.
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014
You're welcome, and thank you for reading me. This poem was very emotional for me when I wrote it, felt great to let it all out. 
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FoolishLamb Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I think you should write one about recovery or even hope after such a traumatic (as it can only be described as such LOL!) experience with that human being in your life. 

It would really, in my opinion, complete this. When I finished reading it, I felt the story or the words shouldn't have ended there..As though there was more to your poem than just the bitter way he'd made you feel. I would love reading a continuation piece.  It's up to you of course, just a suggestion :)
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014
hehe ohh I have, you can see it through my work, here's a couple that show a dramatic emotional shift from one day to the next, if you're interested.

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day after

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I've written a lot on the subject lately too, you can see it in "displace" "proliferation" "i'm back"

thanks for reading me :) I appreciate it! x
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KawaiiShootingStar Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
This is amazing! I really like it~ ^^ Your writing is beautiful... <3
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
oh thank you so much xx
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SeraiFog Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student General Artist
Agreed! When it hurts, write it out! and this was bloody well written out!
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
Thank you :) thanks for reading lovely, I appreciate it x
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Jewel-Firefly Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
Wonderfully crafted. I like "the black hole of your absence," evaporated, dust -- among the effective metaphors for a toxic relationship. And it's so true that boys don't know what they want, even when they're men. Anyway, incredible writing - thanks for posting it!
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
oh thank u so much. You words mean a lot :)
thank u 4 reading :) I am glad you liked it !! xx
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