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I retire from the crowd, feeling kinda strange.
This anxiety is drowning me, somethings gotta change.
I gotta get in my mind's soul and start to rearrange––
your confidence for my sadness, care for an exchange?

This loneliness has company,
Gaining on me subtly,
I'm handing out custody,
I'm left with nil––utterly.

I think about tomorrow; wasting my today.
Already feel broke, before I even gotta pay.
I hear what I wanna hear, not what you have to say.
Losing bits of self; as I try and make my way.

This stressing is messing––
maybe it's a blessing;
dressing up depressing.
Trying to fool me, as it's assessing––
keeping me on my toes daily; guessing.

I need a change, now
I want to be the cause of "wow"
Just give me a go; allow,
I'll be the answer to your "how".


© Rocio Belinda Mendez
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:iconricardo-orozco:
Ricardo-Orozco Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i like this flow of everything : ) and we should make a rap together ;)
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
haha thanks, yeah why not? you can rap it :P x
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shelleypalmer Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, definitely would make a good rap and having had experienced extreme anxiety (only just conquered this) I can say this captures it.
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014
>< really? i'm glad it resonates, sorry you've felt this way though. Thank you for reading me xx
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That-Dude247 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow that's great. Its really unique, and like many great poems it has the feeling of a song, in my opinion
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014
oh thanks :) yeah a lot my rhyming poems with internal line rhyme feel a bit like a song or rap :) thanks for reading, glad u like it xx
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TwinSocks Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ah, yes... anxiety is a... really annoying thing~ xD
wish there was an on/off switch for that~!  - w -'

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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014
>< indeed, an on/off switch for any emotion or thought would be stellar :) thanks for reading x
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TwinSocks Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome~! ^ ^
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LordofPhoenixDawn Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
I can so relate with the feelings here. Well said. ^_^
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014
:) thanks for reading x
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ctndu2 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
I read this and I just wanna lend you my strength, beautifully written and beautifully told
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
Oh thanks so much, i appreciate you reading :) x
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ReiReiSerenade Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This piece is very original and flows very nicely! There isn't anything that I would change about it. :clap: :heart:
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
ohh thank you lovely! I'm glad you feel that way, I appreciate you reading me x
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:iconsixdegreesofrhiannon:
Is it a song you composed? It reminds of The Script because they're style is more often than not like that...I mean like this, for example:
"Take that rage
put it on a page
take the page to the stage
blow the roof off the place" -If You Could See Me Now

But anyway, it's cool a poem. Nice work.Kao Emoji-90 (Ohai) [V5] 

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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
haha nice, I haven't actually heard of them.. but yeah sometimes I just do internal line rhyming if it suits what I'm trying to portray, for this poem it was meant to accentuate the stress or anxiety, I wrote this as a rap/spoken word poem. 

Thanks for reading me x
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msimoneaux20 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nice work. I love the idea and the overall flow. Well written. :thumbsup:
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
yay thanks Malcolm :) I appreciate u reading xx
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msimoneaux20 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I appreciate you sharing. :)
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Kur0-and-Emb3r Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
Very well written. Thank you 
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
oh thanks so much, I appreciate you reading me x
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stargirl141 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is really great! Very descriptive. I like how the voice of the poem even sounds stressed. 
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
thank you lovely :) x
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stargirl141 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you're welcome :)
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AngelaJenkinson Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very well written and a good rendition of Anxiety ... Well done and thank you for sharing :)
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
you're welcome, & thank you for reading! :) x
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AngelaJenkinson Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're most welcome :) x
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artisanduo Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice work, thank you for sharing :)
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
ha as always thank you for reading, I appreciate it…i'm glad you liked this one x
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artisanduo Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome XD
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